Progress

In the beginning of this year, I was a little bit scared of writing long essays that includes complicated and difficult words. I was also scared of making grammar mistakes, since I had some issues with a couple of tenses. Sentence structures was also a problem for me. Putting commas or semicolons was difficult for me, because I didn't know the exact rules for that. I believe that I have made a huge progress since the beginning of this year. 

I set three goals in the beginning of this year including, getting better in writing essays, writing better sentences and developing my grammar knowledge.  

We always write essays in this class, so I think that writing in every class helped me so much. We always try to get better and have other's say their ideas about our essays. Like this, I can see my wrongs and my rights. When I read someone else's essay, I can learn a lot of things from them, too. If there is a word that I don't know, I look up in the dictionary for that word. 

We also learn how to form our sentences correctly. Writing more detailed phrases and more difficult phrases can help my essay get better and express the emotions that I want to give in my essay better. I have never written long essays like two pages. This class helped me develop that part of my writing skill. I had some problems about writing detailed in the beginning of the year, because I know that writing detailed helps me to write a stronger and a better essay. 

Developing my grammar knowledge was one of the most important things that I wanted to work on. I had some issues with a couple of tenses of past. I got to work on them a lot during writing my essays. We also had some activities to help us better understand the grammar errors that we make in our essays. 

I believe that I have worked on these three goals well and I will keep working on. I need to write more detailed in my essays and still pay attention to the grammar mistakes. I can use stronger expressions in my essays to express the emotions better. 

I stopped repeating the same grammar errors, started writing more detailed and forming more difficult sentences. I think that if I were to compare the essays I wrote this year and the previous years, I could see a significant change. I feel more comfortable while writing my essays and I don't get scared of long essays anymore. I know how to develop my essays and my sentences in order to make them better. I hope that in the end of this year my progress will be great. 

Comma after an introductory element handout

5 minutes:rules and explanations

When you begin a sentence with a word or group of words that provides some background, introductory, or otherwise preliminary information, put a comma between this word or phrase and the rest of your sentence. The comma here tells your reader to pause, take the background information into consideration, and get ready to move on to the main part of the sentence.

When to use it?

Introductory elements often require a comma, but not always. Use a comma in the following cases:

After an introductory clause. 

After a long introductory prepositional phrase or more than one introductory prepositional phrase. 

After introductory verbal phrases, some appositive phrases, or absolute phrases.

If there is a distinct pause. 

To avoid confusion. 

When not to use it?

Some introductory elements don't require a comma, and sometimes the subject of a sentence looks like an introductory element but isn't. Do not use a comma in the following cases:

After a brief prepositional phrase. (Is it a single phrase of fewer than five words?)

After a restrictive (essential) appositive phrase. 

To separate the subject from the predicate. 

Examples:

Preparing and submitting his report to the committee for evaluation and possible publication[x] was one of the most difficult tasks Bill had ever attempted.

To start a new business without doing market research and long-term planning in advance[x] would be foolish.

Extracting the most profit for the least expenditure on labor and materials[x] is the primary goal of a capitalist.

DO NOT USE IT!!!

A popular and well respected mayor, Bailey was the clear favorite in the campaign for governor.

Barking insistently, Smokey got us to throw his ball for him.

The wind blowing violently, the townspeople began to seek shelter.

USE IT!!!

10 minutes:practice

Are there any errors in these sentences?

Crying for hours and refusing to sleep 3 year old John convinced his parents to take him to the play garden.

Playing musical instruments and listening to his favorite artists, was his way of relaxing.

However they continued studying Spanish.

With his dark brown eyes and black hairs, Zach was accepted to act as the prince on the show. 

To think that school was useless and that it was nonsense, made Paul think that he didn't need to study.  

Loving and always hugging her children, Caroline thought that she was a good mother. 

Although he made it. 

With its colorful windows and walls, The Painted Ladies in San Francisco always gets people's attention. 

Never getting what the teacher says Alison is always confused. 

With its cold rainy weather and stormy nights, England was his favorite place. 

Although we had reviewed the film twice before, we never noticed these details about the shooting.

After his long nap in the backyard hammock John felt better.

Sadly, the building was destroyed. 

On the other hand someone obviously was badly injured.

  Inside the gym was brightly lighted and clean.

To stay in shape for competition athletes must exercise every day.

In Spring they would all dress up in white to show that summer was coming. 

Entering the room, was dangerous. 

To sell this car you should clean it then put the photos on the internet. 

When he saw the ca coming Jonas stopped and made a quick turn.

5 minutes:acrivities and closure

Acrivities:Station

There are 2 stations in the classroom:wrong and right.

There are some phrases in different places of the classroom. These phrases might have errors about their commas after the introductory elements. If there are errors, you should put those sentences on the station of wrong. If there aren't any errors, you should put them on the station of right. 

Closure

IF Something comes before the subject (other than adjectives THEN  Put a comma after what comes before the subject and its adjectives.

For short prepositional phrases, you can drop the comma. Except for yes or no, direct address and interjections. 

That Moment

I was scared. Totally scared. Scared and excited at the same time.  My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. I was scared, because I was going to live on my own; excited, because it was a new journey. There weren't going to be anyone saying "Did you do your homework?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. Living on my own away from my parents would help me know myself better and grow up.

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed, and then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all better than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was really going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. "Hi. Welcome to Cheshire Academy. I am responsible for touring you guys the campus. If you have any questions let me know okay?" a returning international student said. 

"Where are you from?" he said 

"We are coming from Turkey." 

"Oh, it must be far away from here. How did you find the school?" 

"We found it on the internet and I applied here for the summer school, too". It was so difficult to talk. For every word I said about the school I wanted to cry, but not because of the school, because of my parents. I was going to miss them a lot. I wasn't sure if I was ready or not. 

There were mostly international students and they all had missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From the day 1, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two more weeks. That made me get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that, with them. 

"You need anything?" my dad asked me before leaving. "No. Everything's fine. Thank you so much for letting me study here." I said. "When will you be coming back?" "In 30 days. The time will fly so fast that you won't even remember. I promise." my mom said. They both hugged me. Then headed to the car. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before and had always done what they have wanted from me. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left I tried to smile but it was so difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I could see their sadness, too. I'd never seen them so quiet and so sad. My parents were the ones that I had spent my days and nights with and now, they weren't going to be with me. Instead, there were going to be teachers and friends. I was sure that with different people around me, I was going to develop myself in so many different ways and experience a lot of things. I knew that I would know myself better in conditions of my emotions, and my relationships with people,because everything was going to be new and I had to make new relations with new people. When something bad would happen I would have to deal with it by myself, and that would help me grow up.

I understood at that time that no matter what happens, your family will always be the most important thing in your life. My life was changed; I had started a whole new journey. Was it going to be challenging? Yes. Was it going to be difficult? Yes, but I knew that I wasn't going to give up and do my best at school by remembering why I came here.  

That Moment (final draft)

I was scared. Totally scared. Scared and excited at the same time.  My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. I was scared, because I was going to live on my own; excited, because it was a new journey. There weren't going to be anyone saying "Did you do your home works?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. Living on my own away from my parents would help me know myself better and grow up.

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start to a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all more than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. "Hi. Welcome to Cheshire Academy. I am responsible for touring you guys the campus. If you have any questions let me know okay?" a returning international student said. "Where are you from?" he said "We are coming from Turkey." "Oh, it must be far away from here. How did you find the school?" "We found it on the internet and I applied here for the summer school, too". That was so difficult to talk. For every word I said about the school I wanted to cry, but not because of the school, because of my parents. I was going to miss them a lot. I wasn't sure if I was ready or not. 

There were mostly international students and they all had missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From the day 1, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two more weeks. That made me get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that, with them. 

"You need anything?" my dad asked me before leaving. "No. Everything's fine. Thank you so much for letting me study here." I said. "When will you be coming back?" "In 30 days. The time will fly so fast that you won't even remember. I promise." my mom said. They both hugged me. Then headed to the car. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before and had always done what they have wanted from me. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left I tried to smile but it was so difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I could see their sadness, too. I'd never seen them so quiet and so sad. My parents were the ones that I had spent my days and nights with and now, they weren't going to be with me. Instead, there were going to be teachers and friends. I was sure that with different people around me, I was going to develop myself in so many different ways and experience a lot of things. I knew that I would know myself better in conditions of my emotions, and my relationships with people,because everything was going to be new and I had to make new relations with new people. When something bad would happen I would have to deal with it by myself, and that would help me grow up.

I understood at that time that no matter what happens, your family will always be the most important thing in your life. My life was changed; I had started a whole new journey. Was it going to be challenging? Yes. Was it going to be difficult? Yes, but I knew that I wasn't going to give up and do my best at school by remembering why I came here.  

Challenging But Developing - Blog 5

This paper is about a significant moment in my life that had affected me. There had been a lot of events that had affected me in so many different ways and had different effects on me. I chose the memory where I left my parents and started living at Cheshire Academy.

I chose that memory, because I felt like that was an important moment in my life. I learnt how to live on my own and how to deal with problems on my own. During this paper, I had to write this memory more like a story, but I realized that I had more analysis part than I had story part. Writing the story part was difficult, because I didn't tell just one moment. At first I had to write a couple of events to write my conclusion. I realized that I didn't have so many dialogues. I added more story parts so that the analysis and the story parts could be balanced.

Another difficult part of the paper was writing the thesis statement. I wrote three thesis statements until I found the right one. The thesis statement was difficult, because I had to talk about two different situations so that my thesis could support my story.

They were difficult, because this paper had to be interesting to the readers. I have always written my sentences by thinking if the readers will be interested in them or if they will enjoy the story. I believe that the readers are one of the most important things that I have to think of while I'm writing. The text needs to be readable and interesting. That's why one of the difficult part was the introduction.

I believe that every story gets interest from its introduction. So making the introduction interesting was difficult, too. I had to find interesting sentences or words so that the readers could get attracted and decide to read more. I believe that I was successful at finding the right words, but at first drafts I couldn't  place them at the right places. At my second draft I finally found the right places for the attractive words. I decided to first tell how I felt about the memory so that the readers can be curious about my situation and want to learn more so that they could continue reading the story. 

Putting the events in an order was a little bit difficult,too since first I had to tell more than one event to make the story understandable.At the end of second draft I believe that I succeeded at that part, too.

It is a challenging paper, but I am also learning a lot of things in order to make my story more interesting to the readers and I feel like in every draft I am writing, I am getting better at writing stories, analysis and thesis statements. I feel like at the end of this paper I will be much better in writing stories than I was before. 

That Moment (2nd draft)

I was scared. Totally scared. Scared and excited at the same time.  My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. I was scared, because I was going to live on my own; excited, because it was a new journey. Living on my own was going to help me get to know better myself and being away from my parents was going to help me grow up. There weren't going to be anyone saying "Did you do your home works?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. 

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start to a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all more than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. "Hi. Welcome to Cheshire Academy. I am responsible for touring you guys the campus. If you have any questions let me know okay?" a returning international student said. "Where are you from?" he said "We are coming from Turkey." "Oh, it must be far away from here. How did you find the school?" "We found it on the internet and I applied here for the summer school, too". That was so difficult to talk. For every word I said about the school I wanted to cry, but not because of the school, because of my parents. I was going to miss them a lot. I wasn't sure if I was ready or not. 

There were mostly international students and they all had missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From the day 1, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two more weeks. That made me get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that, with them. 

"You need anything?" my dad asked me before leaving. "No. Everything's fine. Thank you so much for letting me study here." I said. "When will you be coming back?" "In 30 days. The time will fly so fast that you won't even remember. I promise." my mom said. They both hugged me. Then headed to the car. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before or had always done what they have wanted from me. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left I tried to smile but it was difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I could see their sadness, too. I'd never seen them so quiet and so sad. My parents were the ones that I had spent my days and nights with and now, they weren't going to be with me. Instead, there were going to be teachers and friends. I was sure that with different people around me, I was going to develop myself in so many different ways and experience a lot of things. 

I understood at that time that no matter what happens, your family will always be the most important thing in your life. My life was changed; I had started a whole new journey. Was it going to be challenging? Yes. Was it going to be difficult? Yes, but you can't see the rainbow without the rain.

That Moment-2nd draft

That moment was so scary and exciting at the same time. I was scared. Totally scared. My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. So there weren't going to be anyone saying "Did you do your home works?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. 

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start to a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all more than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. "Hi. Welcome to Cheshire Academy. I am responsible for touring you guys the campus. If you have any questions let me know okay?" a returning international student said. "Where are you from?" he said "We are coming from Turkey." "Oh, it must be far away from here. How did you find the school?" "We found it on the internet and I applied here for the summer school, too". That was so difficult to talk. For every word I said about the school I wanted to cry, but not because of the school, because of my parents. I was going to miss them a lot. I wasn't sure if I was ready or not. 

There were mostly international students and they all had missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From the day 1, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two more weeks. That made me get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that, with them. 

"You need anything?" my dad asked me before leaving. "No. Everything's fine. Thank you so much for letting me study here." I said. "When will you be coming back?" "In 30 days. The time will fly so fast that you won't even remember. I promise." my mom said. They both hugged me. Then headed to the car. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before or had always done what they have wanted from me. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left I tried to smile but it was difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I think that that was an important thing for me and my family. My parents were the ones that I had spent my days and nights with and now, they weren't going to be with me. Instead, there were going to be teachers and friends. I was sure that with different people around me, I was going to develop myself in so many different ways and experience a lot of things. 

I understood at that time that no matter what happens, your family will always be the most important thing in your life. My life was changed; I had started a whole new journey. Was it going to be challenging? Yes. I was going to decide what to do in the future. I was going to be ready for my future education life. 

That Moment (final first draft)

That moment was so scary and exciting at the same time. I was scared. Totally scared. My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. So there weren't going to be anyone saying "Did you do your home works?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. 

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start to a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all more than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. It made me feel better about what I was doing. They were mostly international students and they had all missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From the day 1, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two weeks. That made me get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that, with them. 

"You need anything?" my dad asked me before leaving. "No. Everything's fine. Thank you so much for letting me study here." I said. "When will you be coming back?" "In 30 days. The time will fly so fast that you won't even remember. I promise." my mom said. They both hugged me. Then headed to the car. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before or had always done what they have wanted from me. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left I tried to smile but it was difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I think that that was an important thing for me and my family. My parents were the ones that I spent my days and nights with and now, they weren't going to be with me. Instead, there were going to be teachers and friends. I was sure that with different people around me, I was going to develop myself in so many different ways and experience a lot of things. I understood at that time that no matter what happens, your family will always be the most important thing in your life. 

That Moment-First Draft

That moment was so scary and exciting at the same time. I was scared. Totally scared. My parents weren't going to be with me for the next three months. So there weren't going to be anyone who's saying "Did you do your home works?" or "Did you make your bed?". I was going to be on my own. I was happy. I was so happy to be able to start a new life and a new experience. Nothing could have replaced that feeling, because that was a new feeling. Studying abroad was going to change my life. 

That was a regular morning when my mom woke me up and told me that it was the time. It was the time to start to a whole new life. I was sad, because I didn't want to leave my family. We all had our breakfast in the hotel that we stayed then headed to Cheshire Academy. 

School was amazing. Teachers, students, classrooms and dorms were all more than I've expected. While having my key for the dorm, meeting new teachers, signing up for the activities that day, I felt different. At first I felt like I didn't know what was going on. Everything was new. I had to get used to this "new normal". 

I've met some students. It made me feel better about what I was doing. They were mostly international students and they had all missed their families and homes. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who felt scared, made me feel comfortable. I had a lot of friends that day. I didn't know I would meet that many of people in a day. From day one, there were more than fifteen people who I could call a friend. 

When the first day ended I felt good. I felt good about everything. It was the right choice. My parents stayed around Cheshire for two weeks. That made get ready to live on my own. They would visit me after and before school. I wasn't aware that they were going to turn back so I felt like the school days were always going to be like that. 

When my parents left everything has changed. I was all on my own. I really understood the meaning of my parents at that moment. I wished I had never fought with them before or had always done what they wanted from me to do. I experienced the real sadness and realized how strong I was. 

That moment when they got into the car and left, I tried smiling but it was difficult since all I have wanted to do was to cry. I have never felt so confused. I realized the importance of my family. I think that that was an important thing for me and my family. 

About Annie Dillard's Chase

The story tells an event that Annie Dillard had lived when she was a young child. In the story Annie and her friends throw snowballs to the car's that pass in front of them. While they throw, one of the cars stops and the driver gets out; he starts chasing Annie and her friend Mikey. At the end of the story when the man catches them he only tells one sentence to them and lets them go. 

At the end the author was shocked and happy at the same time. She learnt that the glory can't last forever since the man caught them. 

In the story she says "But how could the glory lasted forever?"  We can see the lesson she learnt from this question that she asked. In the story the glory of the chase doesn't last forever so I think that this question can be a good quote to show what she has learnt.  

Everybody Does That

Everybody does grammar mistakes nowadays due to the language of the social media, the films or even the books. There are many of them. For grammar we always think that the one that fits right is the one that is right. It shouldn't be like that all the time. 

One of the most common mistakes that writers do is to use the verbs that are in the same sentence in different tenses. For example in a phrase like "She went to the mall to buy some clothes, meeting with friends and eating in a restaurant." the tenses are wrong. At first it says to buy some clothes which is true but then it says meeting with friends which is wrong. The right one is to use the verb with to and not make it present continuous, because it is one sentence and all of the verbs need to be in the right tense. Another example can be like this "We thought about contacting her in several ways. We could contact her by writing a letter, by texting or call her." In this phrase, by writing a letter and by texting are the right versions but, call her needs to be by calling her so that it can fit into the structure of the other verbs in the phrase. For example "He always hated doing home works, cleaning his room and to take out the trash." In this example the right tenses are cleaning his room and doing his home works. The wrong one is take out the trash. The verbs should be in the same tense as the other ones. 

I sometimes do this mistake when I'm writing so fast. I can fix this problem by paying attention to the phrase and if necessary by reading the phrase over and over again. This mistake is a common mistake so I can also see this kind of mistake in the books, too. I can try to fix those sentences when I find them and rewrite them so that I can understand if the one I wrote is wrong or right. 

I can pay attention to every sentence I write in my writings so that I can avoid making this mistake. Sometimes it is good for me to make someone else read my writings because, like that it is easier to see my mistakes. I can make someone else read it and that person can find the mistakes for me. 

I'm sure at the end of the year I won't have this problem. I will work hard to pay attention to that mistake.  

LETTER TO A CHARACTER FULL DRAFT

Dear Mr. Creuset,

My name is Sera and I'm a 15 year old high school student. I might be 15 but I kind of understand the company business. I want to have my own company when I grow up and I know how to communicate and deal with the customers or with business partners. 

The reason why I'm writing this is to give you some advices so that you can be more successful in your partnerships with other companies. 

I believe that your attitude towards people are wrong and you always think that you can do it by yourself. I'm not just talking about your relationship with your partners, but also with your assistants. For example you told Winda that you can handle anything and that this is your business so you don't need any assistance sometimes. You asked Winda about when did she become timid when she told you that you might need her assistance. I don't believe that this is a good way of communication. 

Secondly, while you were talking business with your partner you didn't even give a chance to let him talk. You always tried to prove yourself. For example you said "Get out of here. I'll never do business with you disrespectful person. Get out!"  

I think that you can fix your communication issues first by listening to people, because I think that listening is the most important thing in communication. You have to be patient and respectful towards people. 

Secondly you can think before you speak. You must be careful not to hurt people while you are speaking. Choosing the right words while you're answering people can help you look better as a person. Finally you should be kind. Being kind is one of the most important things that you can do to develop your communication skills. 

 

I believe that if you do the things I told you, you will be better and more successful in your job, because your job is all about communicating with people. People must be important for you. Respect people and they will respect you, too. 

Best,

Sera Savas