Tuesday, March 31, 2015

Learning Through Hard Work-Draft 3


Afternoon activities at schools are mostly not mandatory, but at Cheshire Academy students have to participate in three seasons of afternoon activities. Three seasons at CA are divided as fall, winter, and spring and the activities are organized by the weather conditions. For example during fall season students can play soccer, volleyball, or they can take place in a play! If they would like to do something that’s not that exhausting as sports, they can join community service, and help the community to get better.
Students have to do two competitive activities, and these are mostly sports, but if a student is not good at sports, that student can help with theater. Some students might want to continue doing the same sport for three seasons if they are good at it. Then that student can choose to be independent, and join a club’s (that is outside of school) sport team. The activities usually take place every weekday from four to five thirty in the afternoon. Some activities don’t take place five times a week. For example dance doesn’t meet on Wednesdays, and Fridays during the spring season. The timing can be a problem for juniors and seniors that work on their college applications, but the majority of students find the activities necessary, and fun. 
I agree with the statement that students should be required to participate in three season of afternoon activities. I believe that these activities can be important because they can help students to meet lots of people,and teachers, help them to manage their time more wisely, and they can help students to learn hard work and teamwork. 

I believe that doing three activities is better than doing two or one activities. Every season, students are able to do different activities, and try new things. For example for fall season I played soccer. It is my first year here, and starting from the day I first came to school, we had preseason. I didn’t have any friends when I came here, but preseason helped me a lot to gain friends. I found a lot of great friends that I could hang out with on the soccer team. After a couple of days we became a family which helped me to get used to the school faster, and easier. I had so many different friends, and hearing their stories and experiences was so much fun. I have gained a lot of experiences, too. I had the chance to play in a varsity team, and see how the games are like. At schools in Turkey, there aren't afternoon activities, so I have never played in a school team before I came here. Experiencing that feeling was very different. For the winter season I played basketball, so I met new people in the basketball team. I got to know some teachers better by spending every day with them. I think that if students do a sport, since they will spend all of their time with the coaches, and their teammates, they can learn a lot of things from them—they become a family. Right now for spring season, I’m doing community service. I’m really excited because we go to a retirement center to talk to some people, and spend time with them. I think that this can be a really good experience, and I can learn a lot from them. Personally, I think that doing three activities is a great way to learn more, and meet more people.

These activities can help students with their school life, too. School’s schedule starts with classes in the morning, and continues with afternoon activities, then ends with activities that are after dinner such as some clubs. Doing the afternoon activities can help the students to manage their times during the school year. In my opinion, these activities also prepares students for their future lives. Because in the future, managing time will be important, since after getting a job students will have a lot of responsibilities. During my first two seasons, I have done sports. Everyday exercise that I had to do during these activities changed my eating habit. I started to eat healthier, and I started thinking more positively. Sports helped me to have a healthier mind which made my school grades get better. I asked some of my friends from the soccer team about how they feel about playing three different sports. They told me that they find it so much fun, because they get to exercise every day, so it helps them with their health. That’s why these activities can help students with their school life by making them healthier, or by helping them to manage their time more wisely.

A majority of these activities aims to teach students teamwork, hard work, and patience. If students are doing theater or sports they can learn about teamwork. During the time I spent playing soccer, and basketball, I watched my teammates’ relationships with other people on the team. For example during soccer whenever someone would miss a shot, nobody would let that person feel bad because she missed the shot. We would all say that we all could have played better. When I started playing soccer I wasn’t as good as other players on the team, so during the first couple of games I wouldn’t play, but I would watch them, and learn their tricks. In a couple of weeks, I got so much better, and I started playing in every game. That taught me to be patient in anything I do, and I learned that with hard work, I can always get better. I think that these activities are important in order to teach students hard work, and teamwork. 

Students can gain new experiences and new friends throughout all three seasons. The difference of activities would not make them feel bored, and would help them meet new people every season. These activities can be good for their personal, and school lives by making them more hard working, and teaching them to be patient. These activities can help students with their future lives as much as they can help them with their school lives. 

Developing My Persuasive Essay

For my second draft, I have changed some grammar errors I had. These grammar errors were usually about the usage of to be verbs, and they were also a couple of typos that I needed to fix. 
I have changed a couple of sentences to make some of the body paragraphs better, but I believe that these changes didn't affect the essay that much. 
For my third draft, I'm planning on developing my examples. I believe that I might have written a lot of personal experiences; I will try supporting my ideas by using other ways. For example I will ask other people about their thoughts on the activities at Chesire Academy. Especially for second and third body paragraphs I will try to add more of other people's opinions to make my essay pore persuasive. 

Monday, March 30, 2015

Learning Through Hard Work-Draft 2


Afternoon activities at schools are mostly not mandatory, but at Cheshire Academy students have to participate in three seasons of afternoon activities. Three seasons at CA are divided as fall, winter, and spring and the activities are organized by the weather conditions. For example during fall season students can play soccer, volleyball, or they can take place in a play! If they would like to do something that’s not that exhausting as sports, they can join community service, and help the community to get better. Students have to do two competitive activities, and these are mostly sports, but if a student is not good at sports, that student can help with theater. Some students might want to continue doing the same sport for three seasons if they are good at it. Then that student can choose to be independent, and join a club’s (that is outside of school) sport team. The activities usually take place every weekday from four to five thirty in the afternoon. For the majority of students, the timing fits well. Some activities don’t happen five times a week. For example dance doesn’t meet on Wednesdays, and Fridays during the spring season. The timing can be a problem for juniors and seniors that work on their college applications, but the majority of students find the activities necessary, and fun. 
I agree with the statement that students should be required to participate in three season of afternoon activities. These activities are helpful for students to gain new experiences by meeting new people, and trying new and different things every season. I believe that these activities can be important because they can help students to meet lots of people,and teachers, help them to manage their time more wisely, and they can help students to learn hard work and teamwork. 

I believe that doing three activities is better than doing two or one activities. Every season, students are able to do different activities, and try new things. For example for fall season I played soccer. It is my first year here, and starting from the day I first came to school, we had preseason. I didn’t have any friends when I came here, but preseason helped me a lot to gain friends. I found a lot of great friends that I could hang out with on the soccer team. After a couple of days we became a family which helped me to get used to school faster, and easier. I had so many different friends, and hearing their stories and experiences was so much fun. For the winter season I played basketball, so I met new people in the basketball team. I got to know some teachers better by spending every day with them. I think that if students do a sport, since they will spend all of their time with the coaches, and their teammates, they can learn a lot of things from them—they become a family. Right now for spring season, I’m doing community service. I’m really excited because we go to a retirement center to talk to some people, and spend time with them. I think that this can be a really good experience, and I can learn a lot from them. Personally, I think that doing three activities is a great way to learn more, and meet more people.

These activities can helps students with their school life, too. School’s schedule starts with classes in the morning, and continues with afternoon activities, then ends with activities that are after dinner such as some clubs. Doing the afternoon activities can help the students to manage their times during the school year. In my opinion, these activities also prepares students for their future lives. Because in the future, managing time will be important, since after getting a job students will have a lot of responsibilities. During my first two seasons, I have done sports. Everyday exercise that I had to do during these activities changed my eating habit. I started to eat healthier, and I started thinking more positively. Sports helped me to have a healthier mind which made my school grades get better. That’s why these activities can help students with their school life by making them healthier, or by helping them to manage their time more wisely.

A majority of these activities aims to teach students teamwork, hard work, and patience. If students are doing theater or sports they can learn about teamwork. During the time I spent playing soccer, and basketball, I watched my teammates’ relationships with other people on the team. For example during soccer whenever someone would miss a shot, nobody would let that person feel bad because she missed the shot. We would all say that we all could have played better. When I started playing soccer I wasn’t as good as other players on the team, so during the first couple of games I wouldn’t play, but I would watch them, and learn their tricks. In a couple of weeks, I got so much better, and I started playing in every game. That taught me to be patient in anything I do, and I learned that with hard work, I can always get better. I think that these activities are important in order to teach students hard work, and teamwork. 

Students can gain new experiences and new friends throughout all three seasons. The difference of activities would not make them feel bored, and would help them meet new people every season. These activities can be good for their personal, ands school lives by making them more hard working, and teaching them to be patient. These activities can help students with their future lives as much as they can help them with their school lives. 

Saturday, March 28, 2015

Outline Of The Persuasive Essay


the requirement at Cheshire Academy that students participate in three seasons of afternoon activities


I agree with the statement. 
Because:
1.It is helpful for students to gain new experiences by meeting new people, and trying new and different things every season. (Thesis)
2.It is helpful for students to meet new people and learn new things from them. 
3.It is helpful for students to experience new kinds of sports or activities that can help them to get to know their talents better. 
4.It is helpful for students to be involved in different kinds of activities that are not always academic. 

Questions
1.Why do students have to participate in three different activities but not one?
2.Why do these activities have to include sports, or competitive activities?
3.How do these activities help students with their school life?
4.What if students don't like the activities they are doing?
5.How can these activities help the students with their personal lives, and their characteristic?

Experiences
1.Met different people and different teachers through three different seasons. Had the chance to spend time with a lot of different people by doing three different things. More activities, more friends and people to meet. 
2.Managing time, and healthier mind. Sports, changed my nutrition habit. Made it better. Made me happier because of everyday exercise. So I was happier during school days. 
3.More hardworking, learned teamwork, learned to be patient (not good at soccer but then developed). 

1st
Intro: 
1.background info, define
2.Agree/Disagree
3.Why?

2nd
By the answers of question
1st paragraph:1st answer
2nd paragraph:2nd answer
3rd paragraph:3rd answer

3rd 
Conclude:
1.Support thesis
2.Support the experiences
















Tuesday, March 24, 2015

Dear Best Friend

Dear Zeynep,

Seeing you over the break felt really good, since we haven't been hanging out for more than three months. It feels weird when we don't see each other for a long time because we have been best friends for ten years now, and we have never been away from each other this long. I'm so happy to have a friend like you that can still make me feel like you're next to me even when you're in an other continent. Whenever I come back from America, we always have so much to say to each other, so many stories to tell, and so many experiences to share. 

I enjoyed seeing you on a Monday for a lunch. It was so much fun, and it was very emotional, too. You told me everything about my old school that is your current school. I have understood that a lot has changed since I've left. I felt kind of sad, since some teachers have left, and some of our friends have gone to other schools. I told you everything about my school, my friends, and my teachers, since you're a very curious person. That day, I felt very lucky to have a friend like you. 

You're such a nice person because since the day you learnt that I was going to go to America you kept saying that as long as I'm happy in America, at my new school, you would be happy for me too, and support me. You reminded me what friendship meant during lunch that day. 

I never want our friendship to break because we're far from each other. From now on, we'll call each other every week to talk about our lives, and to learn how we're doing. I believe that it is going to be fruitful for our friendship. 

Best,

Sera Savas