I really liked this revision because I found it very creative. I liked how the writer created a unique story out of a normal thing. The descriptions are very good, and the organization is well planned. The tansition between paragraphs makes the story easily readable.
2)"Walk Among Dream And Truth" by Leo
I found the story really creative because of the imagination that the writer used. The writer's descriptions were detailed.
3)"Comparison Of My Bottle" by Sophia
I found the descriptions of this text really detailed. I could almost imagined what the bottles looked like. The transition between comparisons were a little uncertain, but the text is easy to understand, and the details help the readers to imagine what the bottles look like.
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