Food Essay Review

I think my Food Essay's grade would be a 4 or 3.5. I think my thesis is specific enough to let reader know what my essay is about. I have a long introduction, so I had to write more on my body paragraphs. I believe that I have written as much as I could to balance my body paragraphs, and introduction. I might still have some problems in my conclusion, but I tried avoiding repeating what I have written in my introduction. I also tried using a wide vocabulary, and tried avoiding the usage of words such as thing, or really.